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Band 3

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 some people,
community
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services
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 that are free, ought to be a crucial part
in
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education
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 system. I partially agree with
this
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 standpoint, since it is more important to focus on
student’s
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students’
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 academic aspects. On the one hand,
community
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services
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 can be helpful for the environment. Since, public places can stay clean, and there will be less litter on the streets. Meanwhile, preserving
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nature is everyone’s responsibility. In Uzbekistan,
for instance
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, schools and universities
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 one special day, when
students
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 and
staffs
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 clean the rooms, streets and green areas.
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, authorities and teachers can
behave
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 their learners to take care of the environment.
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,
students
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 should focus on their
education
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 rather than on other aspects. Since,
quality
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 of
education
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 can decrease, if learners spend
to
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too
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 much time on
community
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services
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 it will
effect
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affect
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on
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their
grates
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grades
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. In European countries ,
for example
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, authorities fund money for educational organizations and they can hire cleaners who can provide
cleaner
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a cleaner
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 atmosphere.
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,
students
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 have to concentrate on study , as it is
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vital for them
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compared
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 to other factors. In conclusion,
while
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 free
community
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services
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 can teach
students
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 to preserve the environment, I personally believe that it should not be a compulsory part of the
education
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 system. It is more important to concentrate student’s focus in study.

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task achievement
Try to develop your ideas in more detail and support them with further examples or explanations. This will help enhance clarity and understanding.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Use linking words to connect your ideas and make your argument more cohesive.
language
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy, especially in verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, as these can lead to confusion in your writing.
task achievement
You have presented a clear stance on the topic, demonstrating your ability to express an opinion, which is crucial for this type of task.
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The examples you provided illustrate some real-life situations, which can make your argument more relatable and engaging for the reader.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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