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Band 4.5

A restaurant has placed an advertisement for waiters and waitresses in your local newspaper. Write a letter to the restaurant,applying for the job.in the letter Explain what you are currently doing Describe your suitability for this area of work Say when you can attend an interview

Dear
sir
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Sir
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 or
madam
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Madam
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, I am writing
this
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 letter for applying My job application regarding a vacancy
of
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for
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 waiters and waitresses. Recently I saw an advertisement in the local newspaper for requirements of
male
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males
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 and females for a brand new restaurant which is located near my home . Previously I was working in a pub bar ,which is basically a night job and makes me very late to come back home .Just because my
work place
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workplace
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 was very far from my accommodation .
However
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,I know how to give service to the customers
as well as
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 I know all the safety rules which need to be followed by the restaurant.Though, I have
also
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 done My
bachelors
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bachelor's
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 in hotel management.
Above all
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,
this
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 restaurant is located very near
from
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to
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 my area which is almost
walking
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within walking
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 distance of 10 minutes
that
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which
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 makes me very comfortable from my previous work. I can attend
interview
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an interview
the interview
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as per
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at
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your
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a
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 suitable time and date your convenience is more important. Looking forward
and
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to and
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very
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am very
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 excited to hear a positive response from you Thanking you Ami shah

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coherence and cohesion
Try to structure your paragraphs more clearly by focusing on one main idea per paragraph. For example, dedicate one paragraph to your current situation and another to your suitability.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to include a proper greeting and closing. Instead of 'Dear sir or madam,' use 'Dear Sir/Madam' for a formal approach and ensure your closing is adequately polite, such as 'Yours sincerely'.
task achievement
Your tone could be more formal and polished. Consider phrases like 'I would like to express my interest in the position' instead of 'I am writing this letter for applying.'
task achievement
You have effectively expressed your interest in the position and provided relevant personal information.
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You included your previous work experience, which adds to your suitability for the job.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • applying
  • suitable
  • hospitality
  • customer service
  • experience
  • enthusiasm
  • availability
  • communication skills
  • attention to detail
  • teamwork
  • food safety
  • certification
  • interview
  • flexibility
  • ambiance
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