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Band 3.5

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010.

The map demonstrates Stokeford city in 1930 and 2010.
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, Stokeford experienced
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a significantly
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significantly
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significant
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expantion
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expansion
 of
residental
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residential
 by
conversion
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the conversion
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 of
agracultural
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agricultural
 lands
in to
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into
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housing
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the housing
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. In past, there was a long road and river which went through
village
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the village
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south
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from south
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 to north and had a bridge at the top of the map where they were connected, alongside the river several houses, shops and post offices were consecutively located. Meanwhile, opposite
of
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apply
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them, the primary school was positioned on top of the gardens and large houses.
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, two farmlands were situated southwest and northeast
side
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sides
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.
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, throughout the years, Number of the swellings has increased.
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,
framlands
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farms
, shops, and
garden
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gardens
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 were removed
instead
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 more homes were built on both sides of
expanded
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apply
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the highway.
While
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 large houses turned into retirement homes, primary
school
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schools
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 increased
its
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their
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 size twice

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demolition
  • residential areas
  • infrastructure
  • urbanization
  • land use
  • farmlands
  • notable buildings
  • layout
  • developments
  • economic growth
  • population growth
  • amenities
  • transformation
  • expansion
  • reconstruction
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