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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information b

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information b
The table illustrates the
number
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 of temporary migrant
employees
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 in Australia , New
Zealand
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, The United Kingdom,
The
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 United States in 2003 and 2006 and the
number
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 of these
employees
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 per 1,000
people
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 in these countries in 2006. From an
overall
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 perspective , it is readily apparent that The United States both years 2006 and 2003
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 the highest of temporary migrant
workers
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 ,
while
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 New
Zealand
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was
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 the lowest among all four countries. In 2006 , 21.1
employees
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 per 1,000
people
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 in New
Zealand
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 that
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considered
 the largest
number
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 compared with the other four countries.
In addition
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 , in 2003 migrant
workers
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 were 65.000 and
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 in the following three years by almost 22000 .
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, New
Zealand
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 was in the
last
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 place in
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number
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a number
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 of temporary migrant
employees
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.
On the other hand
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 ,The United States temporary migrant
workers
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 were 577.00 and rose in 2006 to
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678.000 with 2.3
employees
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 per 1,000
people
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 in
this
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 country in 2006.
Furthermore
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,
Australia
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Australian
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 migrant
workers
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 were 152.00 in 2003 and increased in 2006 by 67.000
employees
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 , with 10.7
employees
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 per 1,000
people
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 in
this
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 country in 2006. The UK migrant
workers
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 were 137.000
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 changed in 2006 to become 266.000 with 4.4
employees
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 per 1,000
people
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 in
this
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 country in 2006.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, employees, zealand, people, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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