In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, the have more opportunities to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

The trend of studying abroad is rapidly increasing in
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used to study in their own country
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college degrees. Both have benefits and drawbacks and will be discussed
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with,there are several benefits of studying in own country. One of them is that
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have to stay far from
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families
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. They can meet their
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whenever they want.
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, they can save money by living with their parents which can be used for other purposes.
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, learners can enjoy their leisure time with their parents whenever they want and they don'
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feel any stress and pressure.
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, some children become dependent on
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whenever they are residing with them because they don'
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have any stress about money and expenses.
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, moving abroad for higher education can help learners to learn about life. In detail,
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studying abroad
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become independent and
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can help them to secure their future. As they are not dependent on others they work and study.
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, in Canada, more than 50% of international
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are paying
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bills and college fees by working part-time.
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can make them multiskilled.
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the drawbacks of going to different countries can not be neglected. Some kids feel
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and they get sick
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sometimes the environment is not suitable for their bodies.
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can have a negative influence on their mind as they become stressed and anxious.
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, both points have merits and demerits which can not be neglected.
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get a chance to explore their
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staying away from
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their families
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.
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living in their home place doesn'
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make them feel homesickness

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Try to refine your introduction by clearly outlining the specific advantages and disadvantages you will discuss.
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You presented a balanced view by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.
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