The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart describes data about how many
injuries
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and
incidents
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were caused by different kinds of transportation.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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demand response had the highest number of
both
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apply
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incidents
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and
injuries
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.
Moreover
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,
incidents
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happened more frequently than
injuries
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in each type of transportation. Looking at the graph in more detail, demand response was by far the highest value in both
incidents
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and
injuries
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, standing at 225 and 173 respectively. The figure for bus and light roll had the same number of
incidents
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, with 7.6
billion
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PMT
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,
while
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bus (66) produced more
injuries
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than light roll (39). Meanwhile, the
quantity
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number
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of
incidents
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in heavy
roil
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slightly surpassed 5
billion
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PMT
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, which
reaching
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reached
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at
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apply
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5.1
billion
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PMT
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.
However
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, its
injuries
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were only 3.5
billion
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PMT
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.
Finally
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, the figure for commuter roil had the lowest number of
incidents
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, which was 22 times lower than demand response.
Injuries
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seldom took place in
this
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type too, with 1.7
billion
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PMT
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words injuries, incidents, billion, pmt with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Passenger Miles Travelled (PMT)
  • incidents per 100 million PMT
  • injuries per 100 million PMT
  • transportation type
  • comparative measures
  • statistical analysis
  • proportionate level
  • anomalous data
  • discrepancies in safety figures
  • severity of incidents
  • frequency of occurrences
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