Some people think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better careers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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care
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pre-school
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preschool
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age. In
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a lots
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of grandparents think
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best way to get the careesrs
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home,
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thy
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change for
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opinion
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alwasy
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it. They can
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try
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think the new
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they
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did not
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any old
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matched
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kid if need it. The working
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know the way to
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the child good
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fot
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for
them,
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because
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did not have the
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like right now. Now in my opinion
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every
parents
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know what is
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best for his child. Like my
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to
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look
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me at home when I was six years old,
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my youngest brother
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is like 7 years
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. Our
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they going with him
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it
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for them now.
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child
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better
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now,
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provied
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provide
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kinds
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of
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for the children.
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the end, every now
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parents
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should
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provide
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for the children. I should say the
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nicer
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before. On the
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every
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parents
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parent
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what the best for
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the
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task achievement
The introduction needs to clearly state the topic and outline the main points you will discuss in your essay. A clearer thesis statement will help guide your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on one clear idea. Each paragraph should relate back to your main argument and contribute to the overall discussion.
task achievement
Use specific examples to support your points. For instance, mentioning the benefits of childcare centers or the emotional support grandparents might provide can strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Check for consistent grammatical structures and spelling errors. Improving these aspects will make your essay easier to read and understand.
task achievement
You presented both sides of the argument, which is essential for this task, showing that you understand the topic.
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You included your own opinion, which is a requirement of the essay prompt.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • childcare centres
  • pre-school age
  • structured learning environment
  • educational activities
  • socialize
  • interact
  • peers
  • committed schedule
  • drop-off
  • pick-up
  • loving
  • nurturing
  • individualized attention
  • cultural
  • familial traditions
  • flexible
  • accommodating
  • intergenerational bond
  • support system
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