The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the percentage of households owning four types of electronic devices between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph
illstrates
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illustrates
the percentage of households
owing
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owning
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four
kins
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kinds
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of electronic devices from 1995 to 2015.
overall
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the information by mentioned and
report
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in the
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primary
primry
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primary
features, and
make
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apply
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comparisons
where
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were
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the
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apply
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similar
overall
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its
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clear that the mobile phone and computer percentage of the line graph showed a significant grow up
scince
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since
science
being during the period,
while
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the proportion
of go
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went
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up as the mostly
using
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,
in
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other
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the other
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side experienced
a
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apply
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MP3 and Tablet
were
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apply
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had
low
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a low
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lunched
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launched
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however
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the tablet
jump
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and
compete
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compete for
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all strong
devics
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devices
device
in detail, the computer and mobile phone rates of

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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