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Band 4.5

Some say that rich countries should help poor countries with trade, health and education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.

It is considered by some that wealthy
nations
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has
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 to assist non-wealthy
countries
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 via trade, health, and education. I agree with
statement
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the statement
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, which
i
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 will explain in subsequent
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paragraphs
 with relevant examples. To commence with, those richer
countries
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 have enough to utilise on other
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nations
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nations'
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 development. As, providing education to poor
countries
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 will help them to improve skills related to different
sectore
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sectors
sector
medical
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of medicine
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,
bussiness
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business
 filed, and
agricultural
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agriculture
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, which will increase their literacy rate.
In
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 a result, they will
do
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not need any
county
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country
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 to invest
on
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in
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 them because with these skilled
workers
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workers,
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 they will provide employment to many
people
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 and improve the condition of their nation.
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, Afghanistan, now become a developing country because
educated
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the educated
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 generation put efforts
to
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enchance
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enhancing
 the quality of their country and
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people
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people's
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 development. Continue to apply reasons, at the time of Covid most
of
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apply
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poor
countries
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face
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problem
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problems
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 to fought with
this
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 detrimental disease. So, in that time most powerful
countries
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 help each of these
nations
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 by
proving
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providing
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 medicines and food.
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, in Africa, where 50% of the population
face
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faces
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issue
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the issue
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 of starvation among children who do not get food on
daily
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a daily
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 basis. In
this
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situation
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situation,
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 help of rich
countries
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 will
safe
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save
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 life of many
people
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 around there.
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, in
underdeveloping
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underdeveloped
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nations
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 there
is
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are
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dedicating
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dedicated
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people
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 who have smart
mind
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minds
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 to invest but lack
of
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apply
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sources
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resources
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 they
loose
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lose
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opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to work. So, if rich
countries
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will
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apply
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show interest and give them
chance
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a chance
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 to trade with them
then
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 it will
make
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increase
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 high
chances
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chance
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 of flurish their skills and make them better
to
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able to
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 do something for their country.
To conclude
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, there are
platheora
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plethora
 of causes that shows how and why
wealtheir
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wealthier
countries
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 have to help poor
nations
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 in order to develop them in many ways
such
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 as in education,
health wise
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health-wise
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, and in
bussiness
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business
 field

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task achievement
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines your main points and structure. Consider rephrasing the thesis statement to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Improve the organization of your ideas within paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea supported by relevant details.
coherence cohesion
Be mindful of grammatical accuracy and vocabulary usage. Proofreading can help eliminate small errors that may distract from your message.
task achievement
You provide relevant examples that illustrate your points, such as the impact of education and the challenges faced during the Covid-19 pandemic.
task achievement
Your argument clearly conveys the importance of support from wealthy countries to poorer nations and presents a strong viewpoint.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trade agreements
  • sustainable growth
  • health initiatives
  • economic productivity
  • educational systems
  • funding
  • resources
  • expertise
  • global stability
  • poverty reduction
  • international cooperation
  • dependency
  • self-sufficiency
  • empowerment
  • assistance
  • investment
  • infrastructure
  • capacity building
  • development aid
  • globalization
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