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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present
The map represents the improvement of the Ryemounth
villange
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village
villages
 in 1995 and
present
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the present
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.
Overall
Linking Words
, Ryemouth
have
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has
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 experienced major changes in infrastructure and conversion of greenery into leisure
facility
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facilities
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. in 1995, there were two roads.
while
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 one of them cut through the area west to
east
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the east
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separates
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separating
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 the row of shops from the fish market which
were
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was
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 above
fishing
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the fishing
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 port
on
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apply
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in the sea, other one went through lines of houses
at
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apply
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northwest to a hotel and cafe which
is oppose
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is opposed
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 to each other
at
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apply
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southeast
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the southeast
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.
Moreover
Linking Words
,
at
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on
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north-east
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the north-east
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 side of the map, farmland was located with a forest park attached to each other

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Residential area
  • Commercial district
  • Public amenities
  • Greenery
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Demolition
  • Construction
  • Accessibility
  • Public transport
  • Urbanization
  • Evolution
  • Gentrification
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