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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
The line graph illustrates the quantities of
goods
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 which were transported by road,
water
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,
rail
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, and
pipline
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pipeline
 in the UK from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
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, most of
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goods
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the goods
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 were transported by road,
while
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 the least by
pipline
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pipeline
 during the 28-year period. Meanwhile, the
overall
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 quantities of
goods
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 had increased, with the exception of
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 transported by
rail
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. In 1974,
rail
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 was the most prevalent means to transport
goods
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 with approximately 70
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 of them being delivered, surpassing roughly 40
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 by
water
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 and
rail
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, and less than 10
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 by pipeline.
Goods
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 which were transported by pipeline gradually
increaed
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increased
 to 22
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 1994 and plateaued.
The
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 similar trend can
also
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 be observed in
goods
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 transported by road, growing steadily to 80
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 1990 before it reached its peak at 98
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 2002. The
figuers
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figures
figure
of
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goods
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 transported by
water
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 and
rail
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 were relatively unstable. The quantities of
goods
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 transported by
rail
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 decreased steadily to only 30
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 1982 and fluctuated between 30 to 40
million
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tones
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tonnes
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, before ending with 42
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in the
last
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 year.
Goods
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 transported by
water
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 rose to 58
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 1982, but never exceeded 60
million
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tones
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 until 2002.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, water, rail, million, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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