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Parents are the best teacher. Do you agree or disagree ?

I agree that parents are the best
teacher
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teachers
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. From
childhood
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childhood,
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 they teach us many things like talking, walking and behaving
good
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well
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 with others. Before we go to school, we already learn many basic things from them. My mother always
teach
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teaches
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 me to be kind and help people. My father
show
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shows
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 me how to solve problems and be strong. They give advice when we need
and
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it and
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 support us in hard times. Teachers at school are
also
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 important. They teach science, math and other subjects. But parents teach life lessons which
is
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are
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 more useful sometimes.
Also
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, they spend more time with us than teachers. Maybe parents
not
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are not
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 always correct or professional, but they love us more and try their best. That’s why I think they are the best teacher.

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structure
Try to include a more defined introduction with a clear thesis statement. This helps set the stage for the arguments you will present.
style
Ensure to vary your sentence structures to enhance fluency and engagement. Short sentences can make the essay feel simple, while varied lengths add interest.
content
While your points are relevant, providing more specific examples or elaboration on the life lessons learned from parents could strengthen your argument.
content
You have presented clear ideas about the role parents play in teaching children valuable life lessons, which is central to the task.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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