The bar chart below shows the salt intake of men and women in different age groups in a country in Europe in 2019.

The bar graph compares the salt
intake
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of
men
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and
women
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in the nine
age
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groups in 2019. It can clearly be seen that during the whole period,
while
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both
men
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and
women
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showed an upward and downward trend with
age
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in salt
intake
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, the figures for
women
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were lower than those of
men
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in all
age
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groups. Looking first at the figures for
men
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in salt
intake
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, we can see that in the youngest
age
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group
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, the figure for
men
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was
at
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1600mg, which was below the recommended daily
intake
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of 3200mg. It increased with
age
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to around 5000mg in the 30-39
age
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group
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. It decreased to approximately 4000mg in the over-70
age
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group
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. Turning to the figures for
women
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, we can see
that
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similar but slightly different trends. In the youngest
age
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group
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, the figure for
women
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was slightly lower than that of
men
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, at around 1200. In the older
age
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group
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, it grew to around 5000mg in the 30-39
age
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group
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, being 1000mg lower than that for
men
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. It gradually fell to around 2300mg in the
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of
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over 70 years old, whose number is the recommended daily
intake
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words intake, men, women, age, group, mg with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • salt intake
  • age groups
  • men
  • women
  • bar chart
  • trend
  • significant differences
  • consume
  • notable
  • variations
  • highest
  • lowest
  • implications
  • health
  • long-term effects
  • recommendations
  • demographics
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