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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions)of telephone calls in the uk, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002 . Summarise the information

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions)of telephone calls in the uk, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002 . Summarise the information
The bar graph illustrates the total
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 of
minutes
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 (in billions) of three different categories of telephone calls in the UK between 1995 and 2002.
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, it can be seen that the total of calls by national and international fixed lines, and mobiles increased gradually over the entire period,
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although
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 the figure for local fixed line calls witnessed a downward trend after 1999, it was the highest in
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 over the entire time span.
To begin
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 of national and international calls in 1995 was around 37
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minutes
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 it saw a gradual rise to just over 60
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minutes
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 by the end of the mentioned period. In the meantime, mobile calls experienced a slow increase from nearly 3
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minutes
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 in 1995 to over 10
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 in 1999
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 and
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 continued with a significant surge to around 45
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 minute calls in the year 2002.
On the other hand
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, the
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 of
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 spent over local fixed lines was over 70
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minutes
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 in 1995, which was many times greater than that of mobile calls in the same year, and slowly went up till 1999 to reach the peak point among all other modes of calls. The figure for local calls
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 slowly went down to just over 70
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minutes
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 in 2000,
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,
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 was still the highest among all of the other modes throughout the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slow" was used 3 times.
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