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The charts below give information about the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts illustrate the different
age
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 groups of
visitors
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 in the UK and Spain from 1983 to 2003.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the 35 to 54-year-olds were the largest
group
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.
Additionally
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, the 0-24
age
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group
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as well as
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 the retiring
age
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group
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 were likely to experience a moderate rise,
whereas
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 the remaining figures were set to decline in both two periods.
This
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 analysis will commence with the proportion of tourists in 1983. In connection with the 35 to 54-year-olds, the figures outnumbered any other
age
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 range at 50% tourists.
Similarly
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, the data for the 25-34
age
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group
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 were modestly higher than for the
visitors
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 aged 55 or over, at 20% and 16%, respectively. Concurrently, the under 16
age
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group
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 was 10% more than double the 16-24 years was only 4%
visitors
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. Attention will now be turned to the proportion of
visitors
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 in 2003. With respect to the 35-54
age
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 range, the figures diminished palpably to 35%
visitors
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 but still were the largest
group
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.
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, concerning the 25 to 34
age
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group
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, there was a trivial decline in the figure by 8% to 12% tourists in 2003.
In contrast
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, for the 0-15, 16-24 and 55 or over
age
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 groups, the data increased tangibly to 12%, 15% and 26%
visitors
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, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, visitors, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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