The charts below give information about the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below give information about the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below give information about the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and in 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The two pies illustrate information related to
visitors
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in
United
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the United
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Kindom
according to
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their age over a 20-year period from 1983 to 2003.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that the majority of
visitors
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between
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were between
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35 to 54
years
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old in the given period. On
other
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the other
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hand, a small
fractions
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fraction
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of the
percentage
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for the
visitors
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who were between 0-10 and 16-24
years
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old . In 1983, half of the individuals were between 35-
54
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and 54
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years
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old
also
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it cosider as the highest
percentage
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compared to other categories.
while
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children less than 15
years
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old had the lowest
percentage
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by
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of
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10%. Both 55+ and 25-34
years
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old had
approximatley
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approximately
the same
numbers
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number
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of
visitors
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. From 1983 to 2003, the number of
visitor
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visitors
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had slightly
decrease
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decreased
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especially
who
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those who
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were between 35-54
years
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old. It decreased from 50% to 35%.
whereas
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,
16
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the 16
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-24
years
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old category had
sharp
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a sharp
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rose
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rise
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by
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of
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almost 11
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percentage
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per cent
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compared to 1983.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, years, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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