The government should reduce the amount of money spent on local environmental problems and instead increase funding into urgent and more threatening issues such as global warming. To what extent do you agree?

It is suggested that reducing funds which are aimed at precluding internal environmental
problems
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would be better as
governments
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should pay more attention to global environmental issues
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as global warming. The essay does not support the provided idea because of believing in the importance of regional environmental
problems
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and the need to control and tackle these
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along with
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more international ones. There are various countries in the world, which have various
problems
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: political, economic
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environmental. Facing threatening consequences of ecological issues, humanity has started to take into consideration how to deal with them effectively. All over the world,
governments
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impose different programs, policies and restrictions in order to preclude them. Being either local or international, environmental
problems
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pose a danger to society. At the same time, regional
problems
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can easily turn into global ones, increasing
damage
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the damage
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they can bring.
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, it is inappropriate to reduce funds
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local environmental issues as it can lead to
deterioration
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the deterioration
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of
situation
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the situation
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.
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, in 2011, the Ministry of Ecology of Iran sharply decreased the budget dedicated to regional environmental
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,
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result
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these
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became more serious and damaging; the quality of drinking water deteriorated, which led to a rise in illnesses among the population.
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, not only states but
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non-governmental organisations, eco-activists and
public
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actively try to solve international ecological
problems
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in many ways. Being environmentally conscious, they adopt sustainable practices
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and, circular
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circular
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economy and boost environmental awareness among people.
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, the are many multilateral agreements and conventions which make
governments
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engage in the process of tackling climate change;they all have been spending much effort and money on that purpose.
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, one of the most famous agreements is the Paris Agreement from 2015, which makes all nations limit global warming well below 2°C. Since
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, all of them have been contributing to that process and much funds have been spent.
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,
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some believe that
governments
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should increase budgets for global environmental
problems
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and decline them for the local ones, the essay disagrees with it
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finding both
problems
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serious and saying they both should be studied and addressed. Obviously, enough attention is already given to global warming and others.

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Task Achievement
Consider elaborating on your counter-arguments or alternative viewpoints to make your position on local versus global issues clearer and more comprehensive.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use a wider range of cohesive devices to link your ideas smoothly and improve the overall flow of your essay.
Task Achievement
Your introduction clearly outlines your stance on the issue, and your examples are relevant and strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a logical progression of ideas, making it easy for the reader to follow your argument.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urgent issues
  • global warming
  • local environmental problems
  • funding
  • redirecting funds
  • broader environmental health
  • financial efficiency
  • return on investment
  • cost-effective
  • holistic approach
  • moral and ethical considerations
  • resource allocation
  • long-term consequences
  • short-term impacts
  • competing environmental concerns
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