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The maps show changes in the local industrial village in England called Stamdorf between 1985 and 2015.

The maps show changes in the local industrial village in England called Stamdorf between 1985 and 2015.
The two maps depict the main changes which have taken place in a local industrial village of England (
Stanmford
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Stanford
) between the years 1985 and 2015.
Overall
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, it appears that Stamford has become a much more contemporary village, with far more housing estates,
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moderate
modarate
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modern
 and improved
version
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versions
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 of other facilities One interesting
changes
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change
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are
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 that new housing estates have been erected to the west and the south-east of
map
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the map
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 to
tranform
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transform
 Stamfort
to
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the
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a
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resident
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residence
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 place. In 1985 there was not any
accomodation
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accommodation
 for
labours
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labourers
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 to the north-west of the plan,but
a
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an
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 industrial stuff quarter
has been
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 built
instead
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 of small roadside inns.
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 they have been replaced to the south-east of the map. If we look at
north
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the north
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 side, we will see Stamdorf's industrial area changed a lot from 1985 to 2015. The factory and wooden bridge disappeared and
replaced
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were replaced
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 with new steel
bridge
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bridges
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 and
industrical
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industrial
 zone. Only the Thames River stayed the same. The area completely changed from industrial to residential. In
additon
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addition
, by 2015 Stamford became more verdant than its previous pattern.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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