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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps illustrate the changes that took place in Porth
Harbor
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 between the year 2000 and today.
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, the
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area
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 has been modernised and developed for tourism.
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 the main structure of the
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 has remained the same, some old buildings were removed, and several new facilities were added. In 2000, the eastern side of the
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 had a dock with passenger ferries, and there was a disused castle
further
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 along the coast. Today,
this
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 castle has been replaced with a large hotel, and a private road leading to the hotel has been built. The passenger ferry dock still exists, but now there are more ferries shown in the
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. On the western side, the showers and toilets, car parks, marina for private yachts, and fishing boats have stayed in the same location.
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, a new row of cafés and shops has been built between the road and the lifeboat station, adding a commercial
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 for visitors. The public beach and the dock
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 remain unchanged, but the
overall
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area
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 looks more welcoming to tourists and visitors now. The changes suggest that the
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 has shifted from a mostly functional
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 to a more tourist-friendly location with hotels, cafés, and better access.

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task achievement
Consider expanding the analysis of how specific areas have changed over time by providing more comparative details between the two maps.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure there are clear linking phrases between paragraphs to enhance the flow of ideas, especially in transitions from one feature to another.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear overall structure, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and an implied conclusion. This makes it easy to follow.
task achievement
You have effectively identified key changes in the harbor, showing a good understanding of the maps provided.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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