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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the dynamic
shifs
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shifts
shift
 in
prices
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 of
copper
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,
nickel
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 and zinc every month in 2014.
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, by January, the
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prices
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change
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 of all three kinds of materials
repreasented
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represented
 a downward tendency. Meanwhile, the
prices
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 of zinc and
nickel
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 witnessed a similar trend throughout
whole
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 year. In
january
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January
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,
nickel
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 started with the highest
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prices
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price
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change
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 at 6%, narrowly surpassing
copper
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 at 2% and
zince
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since
zinc
 at 1%. The
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prices
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change
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 of
nickel
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 dropped significantly to 1% in March and leveled off before dropping
dramtically
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dramatically
 again to -3% by
June
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,
while
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 that of zinc rose slightly to 3% in February first before decreasing stably to -1% by
June
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. After
June
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,
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prices
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price changes
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change
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 of
nickel
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 and
copper
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 rose again and plateaued the next four months before both materials dropped and
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 rose to 1% and 2% respectively in December. Regarding
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the prices
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prices
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change
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 of
copper
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, it decreased steadily from 2% to -0.5% by
June
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. The figures met a slight increase and
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 remained
unchnaged
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unchanged
 at 1% from July to September, and dropped a little bit to 0.5 % before ending with 1.5%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, copper, nickel, change, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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