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The diagram below describes the structure of a home smokery and how it works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below describes the structure of a home smokery and how it works. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the structure and functioning of a home smokery, showing the steps involved in the smoking process used to preserve and
flavor
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flavour
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food
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.
Overall
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, the smokery consists of two main underground chambers and an above-ground smoking cabinet where
food
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 is processed.
First,
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fresh air enters the system through an intake on the far left. The air is drawn downward into a
chamber
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that is
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 covered by a slanted lid. The air
then
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 moves horizontally into the next
chamber
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 where logs are burning, producing
smoke
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.
This
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chamber
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 is
also
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 covered by a lid to control the heat and
smoke
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 levels. The
smoke
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 generated in
this
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chamber
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 travels through a pipe that slopes upward and leads to the smoking
chamber
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, which is located
above-ground
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above ground
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 level. In
this
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 final
chamber
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,
food
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 items
such
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 as fish are hung from rods, allowing the
smoke
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 to circulate and cure them. The
smoke
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 slowly envelops the
food
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, preserving it and adding
flavor
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flavour
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, chamber, smoke with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • firebox
  • smoke generation
  • underground passage
  • smoking chamber
  • smoke flow
  • vent
  • consistent flow
  • smoked flavor
  • indirect heat
  • structure
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