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As computers are being used more and more in educ ation, there will soon be no role for teachers in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with this statement

Nowadays the use of
technology
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 has been increasing dramatically in every sector and
espicially
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especially
 in education and many people think that it will affect the role of a teacher in the classroom, I completely disagree with
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 statement and in
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essay
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i
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 will discuss my opinion.
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,
teachers
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 role would never be less important. In fact, the importance of their existence has noticed a significant increase lately, and
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 because they help with improving communication skills, having a mentor will help you communicate your thoughts and opinions a lot
instead
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 of having a computer only correcting your mistakes,
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 there is no
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denial
 of how much impact
technology
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 has and the help it provided but it is still of paramount importance to have someone who teache and guide.
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, they make studying more fun
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for example
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 playing games, having group projects
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etc. with
technology
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 it would be strict studying and it would be boring for students
espicially
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especially
 in
elementry
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elementary
 school and that would make them hate school. In conclusion,
technology
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 can help improve
educating
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students
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of students
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 but it will not affect the
teachers
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teacher's
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 existence at all.

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grammar
Work on your grammatical accuracy and spelling to present your ideas more clearly. For example, ‘teache’ should be ‘teach’, and ‘espicially’ should be ‘especially’.
content
Try to elaborate on your points with more specific examples or explanations to strengthen your argument. This will also help to improve task achievement.
cohesion
Enhance the logical flow by using more linking words and phrases. This could help in connecting your ideas more effectively and improving overall coherence.
content
Your ability to express a clear opinion in the introduction is commendable, as it sets a direct tone for your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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