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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
The provided bar chart presents a global overview of estimated
illiteracy
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rates
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, disaggregated by region and
gender
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 for a specified year. The data highlights significant variations in literacy levels across different geographical areas and between the sexes. Globally, a clear trend emerges: female
illiteracy
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rates
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 consistently surpass those of males across all regions depicted. South Asia stands out as the region with the highest
illiteracy
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rates
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 for both genders, indicating a substantial challenge in achieving universal literacy within
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 area. The disparity between male and female
illiteracy
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 is particularly pronounced in certain regions. Sub-Saharan Africa demonstrates a considerable
gender
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 gap, with female
illiteracy
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 reaching approximately 47%, significantly higher than the male rate of around 30%. A
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 large discrepancy is evident in the Arab States, where female
illiteracy
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 exceeds 50%,
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 male
illiteracy
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 remains below 30%. South Asia
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 shows a marked difference, with female
illiteracy
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 at approximately 57% contrasted with the male rate of nearly 35%.
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, Developed Countries and the Americas/Caribbean exhibit relatively small
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 discrepancies in
illiteracy
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rates
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. Developed Countries report approximately 2% female
illiteracy
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 and 1% male
illiteracy
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. The Americas/Caribbean show
rates
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 of around 11% for females and 10% for males. East Asia/Oceania
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 displays a relatively minor
gender
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 gap, with female
illiteracy
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 at approximately 20% compared to under 10% for males.
This
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 suggests that progress towards
gender
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 equality in literacy is more advanced in these regions.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, rates, gender with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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