The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the change in the percentage of maket share represented by the three forms.

The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the change in the percentage of maket share represented by the three forms.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph shows the cost for watching films. The pie charts show the change in the percentage of maket share represented by the three forms.
The graph shows the
price
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to watch
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of watching
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movies,
while
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the chart illustrates the amount of different forms of
people
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watching films.
Overall
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, all
the
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three forms were experiencing an increase in
price
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,
although
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legal
download
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seemed to
had
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have
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a downward at the beginning.
On the other hand
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, there was a significant change in the way
people
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watched films in 2005 compared to
in
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apply
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2011. In 2005, the
ticket’s
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ticket
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price
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of
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cinema
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the cinema
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was the highest among the two others with close to 10
poundsterlings
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pound sterlings
pound sterling
compared to 8 and 6
poundsterlings
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pound sterlings
pound sterling
for
DVD
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and legal
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download
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downloads
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. In 2007, there was a significant discount for legal
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download
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downloads
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and reached the bottom at 6, despite
considerable
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the considerable
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upward of the other two, and
in
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at
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this
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time
DVD
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had
overtake
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overtaken
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the
price
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. In the end, the cost to watch
movie
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a movie
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remained the same as it happened in the beginning with
cinema
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remained
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remaining
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in
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at
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the top, followed by legal
download
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, and
then
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DVD
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in
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at
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the lowest. Back
to
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in
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2005,
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DVD’s
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DVD
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rent and
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cinema
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cinemas
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where
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were
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dominating the way
people
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watched a movie with 64%
for
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to
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DVD
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DVDs
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and 30% for went to
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cinema
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the cinema
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. Surprisingly, in 2011 there was a massive overturn for
people
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who watched films online
accounted
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accounting
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for about 26%,
while
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other
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others
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experienced a downfall with
DVD
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went
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going
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to 56% and
cinema
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almost lost
the
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apply
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hafl
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half
of it with just 18%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price, people, download, cinema, dvd with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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