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Nowadays,many people choose to be self-employed,rather than to work for a company or organisation.why might this be the case?what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed?

In recent years, many
people
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 tend to
work
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 as self-employed rather than applying for
work
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 as workers in a company or organization.
This
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 essay will discuss the reason for
this
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 case and the
drawback
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drawbacks
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 of being self-employed.
To begin
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 with, being self-employed offers
time
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 flexibility.
People
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 are considered to have a lot of
time
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 if they do not
work
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 for a company or organization. They can manage their
time
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 and put another priority aside from working from 9 am to 5 pm as regular workers do in the office. Another reason why is that in
this
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 case,
people
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 can
work
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 from anywhere.
By not
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 being a corporate worker,
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this
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allows every individual to
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 from
any
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different places, they do not have to go
for
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work
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 and
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wear
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 some kind of uniform.
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, some
people
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 can go for a holiday in another country
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bringing
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 their job. They can
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 at any place if they want.
On the other hand
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, self-employed
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also
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 have several drawbacks
such
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 as
lack
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a lack
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 of
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 management and
people
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 do not have
permanent
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a permanent
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 income. Self-employed
people
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 sometimes have a bad management of
time
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, because they do the project alone and do not hire a partner or assistant to
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 with them.
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, they tend to
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 out of the schedule and the target may be overtime.
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, self-employed individuals cannot get
specific
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 monthly income. They will get paid if the project is over.
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,
people
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 who
work
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 in the creative industry,
they
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apply
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will get paid if they have done the project.
This
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 thing can be a
double edged
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 sword for the
people
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 because sometimes they have to use their savings. In conclusion, working as a self-employed gives flexibility in
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 and gives offers to
work
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 from anywhere.
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, there are several drawbacks
from
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this
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 case because sometimes
people
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 have bad
time
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 management and do not have permanent income.

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task achievement
Consider elaborating on the reasons you listed for people choosing self-employment. A more detailed explanation can enhance the clarity of your position.
task achievement
Ensure that your main points are well-supported with specific examples. This can strengthen your overall argument and demonstrate critical thinking.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the structure of your paragraphs. Each paragraph should ideally start with a clear topic sentence that outlines the main idea, followed by supporting details.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use a wider range of cohesive devices to link your ideas. This will improve the flow of your essay and help the reader follow your arguments more easily.
structure
Your essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, outlining the main topics you will discuss and summarizing them effectively at the end.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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