The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.
The chart illustrates the unemployment rate, in 2012, by splitting the year for 4 quarters, in Australia in rural and urban
areas
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Overall
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, the maximum and the minimum were in the first part of the period but in
the
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different
areas
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That is
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to say, the peak was in rural and the lowest point was in urban
areas
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. The number is in percentage.
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with, in rural parts in the first quarter, the line was the highest one, as it reached around 6,5, meanwhile, in the fourth one, it fell
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5. In the second and the third ones, it was like a little zigzag.
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, the urban
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' line is really jagged almost in every part.
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,
firstly
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, it was a little more than 2. In the second
quarter
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it was 4
then
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turned into 2 again and after moved irregularly and
lastly
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, reached 5, which was almost connected with another line.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words areas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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