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The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the number of hours that students study each day at five different universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts give information about the number of
hours
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 that students study each day at five different universities, the information type
showed
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shown
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 by
hours
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 in both charts.
Overall
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.it's clear from the chart that the students on the weekdays
shows
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show
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 an incline in the
hours
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 of studying in the universities, in the second chart is the opposite which shows a
decline
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 in the studying
hours
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.
According to
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 the charts, the first
group
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 A shows
slight
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a slight
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decline
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 around 80 min , the second
group
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 shows
low
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a low
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around
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of around
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 1.5
hour
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hours
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, the third
group
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 shows
decrease
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a decrease
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around
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of around
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 3
hours
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, the fourth
group
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 have
massive
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a massive
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decline
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around
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of around
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 4
hours
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 ,
the
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and the
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 4
group
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decline
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declines
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 around 4
hours
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 . In
conclusin
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conclusion
, the students who
has
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have
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showed
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shown
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al
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a
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 less drop
of
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in
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the
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apply
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studying
hours
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 among the universities
is
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are
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 the A
group
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 ,
B
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the B
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group
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 comes
to
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apply
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second place , and the third is C and B and D
group
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 shows nearly the same
decline
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 in the
hours
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 .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, decline, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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