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Band 2.5

In the future, people many no longer be able to pay for things in shops using card all payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this well happen in one day Why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

Many
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people
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use everything unique
 and new by
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technology
, and they
happy
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are happy
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anythings
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anything
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 not
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traditional
such
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use
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tagnical
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technical
magical
 for payments by card or more than where we are now, in the
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author
 said, many
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people
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use
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whate
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what
white
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specially
 if related a
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money
,
this
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based
 on some
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response
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present
 on upcoming
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paragraph
.
Human
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A human
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 can
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thinking
think
 about
improve
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improving
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eveythings
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everything
may
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that may
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 lead to
make
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making
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 our life easier and
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smoother
smother
, if we go back many years old, no one can
expactation
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expectation
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use
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electronice
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electronic
mation
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motion
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mobail
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mobile
phone
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 or card) to pay, but now
this
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way
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 it's
allowd
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allowed
 us more
comfotable
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comfortable
, but some
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people
dosn'
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doesn't
t
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 like
use
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 card
ot
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or
phone
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 to payments
mebye
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maybe
 they don'
t
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 trust of
this
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way
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, and can'
t
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 understand the
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negative
native
afacts
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facts
 or issues in
this
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way
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 and how they solved or
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thinking
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this
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way
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 have many
risk
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risks
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 more than having cash. The
last
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 thing here I would like to
mantion
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mention
it
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is
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, the
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positive
 and
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negative
give
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the madolgy
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madolgy
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radiology
 payments, for cards or
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phone
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phones
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 it's easy and
dosn'
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doesn't
t
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 take
a
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apply
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space or time and we can
shoping
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shopping
shop
 online with it, but
in
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at
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 the same time
it's has
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it has
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 risk from
hakrs
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hackers
 or lost the cars or
phone
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, and the cash the only risk
mebye
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me bye
maybe
happind
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happened
is steal
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is stolen
is stealing
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 the
mony
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money
 or lost it.

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language
Try to improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and spelling.
structure
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and supports it with relevant examples or explanations.
structure
Include a clearer introduction and conclusion to frame your arguments and summarize your points effectively.
content
You demonstrate an attempt to engage with the topic and express personal opinions about cashless payments.
content
Your essay presents some ideas about the advantages and disadvantages of cashless payments, showing critical thinking.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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