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Writing Samples
Band 3

Some people prefer to carefully plan activities in their free time others think it’s a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your answer?

It is argued that
people
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 should spend
thier
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their
 leisure
time
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to
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planning
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plan
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 activities,
while
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 others believe it is a
waste
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 of
time
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. I believe that free
time
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 should be used to do meaningful work or to
plan
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 for future events, which could help save
time
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. On the one hand, planning activities in
free
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their free
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time
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prevents
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prevent
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people
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 from missing important events, because it allows them to remember
it
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them
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 early.
In addition
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 to that, when making a
plan
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 can optimize
time
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 by mentioning
time
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 frames, which could help to reduce the
waste
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 of
time
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.
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,
in
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apply
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travel schedules can consist of stops, routes and expected
time
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 for departure and arrival for more
convenient
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.
Therefore
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, before any activities
should make
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 a
plan
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helps
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should be made
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 to minimize the
waste
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 of
time
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, and reduce the missing tasks.
On the other hand
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, Free
time
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 can
use
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 for family members or
spend
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spent
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for
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on
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 personal things rather than
spending
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apply
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to arrange future plans.
This
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 is because
people
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 who have free
time
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they
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apply
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possibly prefer to stay home with family, watch a movie or sleep. Because of that,
people
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 can take
this
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 as a
waste
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 of
time
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. In conclusion,
while
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 some
people
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make
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apply
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a
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apply
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debate
about
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that
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the
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apply
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future planning is a type of
a
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apply
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time wasting
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time-wasting
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,
but
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apply
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according to
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 my
perspective
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perspective,
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 it is
a
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apply
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time saving
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time-saving
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 and
minimize
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minimizes
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the
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apply
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mistakes.

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Try to express your ideas more clearly and thoroughly. Ensure that each point is fully developed and articulated, so that the reader can easily understand your meaning.
coherence and cohesion
Work on ensuring that your paragraphs have clear topic sentences and that your ideas flow logically from one to the next. Using linking words can also help enhance coherence.
general
Make sure to proofread your essay for spelling errors (e.g., "thier" should be "their") and grammatical mistakes, as these can detract from the overall quality of your writing.
task achievement
You present a clear opinion in your introduction and a summary in your conclusion, which helps frame your essay.
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You attempt to discuss different perspectives on the topic, showcasing an understanding of the complexity of the issue.
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You provide relevant examples related to planning activities that can illustrate your points well.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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