The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four counthies in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four counthies in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four counthies in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The charts illustrate the comparison of the
employment
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rate of
the
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apply
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60 -
64 years old
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64-year-old
men and
women
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in Belgium,
USA
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the USA
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, Japan, and Australia in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
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, the
men
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employment
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proportion significantly exceeded the
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women
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women's
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employment
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in four countries
overtime
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over time
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.
While
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the male
employment
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rate
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was consistenly
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consistenly
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consistently
higher in 1970, the proportion of
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women
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women's
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employment
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fluctuated over the period.
According to
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the first chart, there was a remarkable fall
around
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60% in
men
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employment
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in Belgium, decreasing from 79% in 1970 to 19% in 2000. A similar trend can be observed in Australia where the number dropped by approximately one-
third,
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dropping from 76% to 47% over three decades.
On the other hand
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, female
employment
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saw a
vary
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trend over the 30 years period. The
employment
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rate of the
elder
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in Belgium and Japan was relatively higher in 1970,
whereas
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the two other countries recorded
higher
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a higher
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proportion in 2000 compared to 1970.
Similarly
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, all four countries experienced
fluctuation
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of around 1% to 3% in
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women
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women's
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employment
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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