21.CLOTHES •Describe your favorite piece of clothing. You should say: •Where you got it •Do you often wear it •When you wear it And explain why it is your favorite piece of clothing.

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a tough question for me, but if I had to choose, I would say that my
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piece of clothing is probably my new Micheal Kors Woven
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Coat
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. The Woven
trench
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coat
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I have in mind is from a Michael Kors store at Westfield shopping
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. I bought it a few months ago when I visited a friend of mine who lives near there. I wandered around
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stores to check for a new
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and
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I stopped at the Michael Kors store. As soon as I saw the
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on
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of the store mannequins, I wanted to try it on and grabbed the first
one
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I saw on the rack.
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trench
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is
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of my
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articles of clothing because it is comfortable, stylish and pretty warm. Now that the weather is cooling down, the
trench
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coat
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is perfect for everyday wear. I actually can match it with lots of different styles for casual yet
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stylish. As for how often and when I wear it, I wear the
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several times a week, especially if it is a windy day. I hope
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I will get another
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similar but in a different colour in the future.

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coherence and cohesion
The introduction is clear, but adding a brief mention of why the coat stands out to you right at the beginning could engage the reader further.
task achievement
While your points are supported with examples, consider expanding on 'why' those features (comfort, style, warmth) make the trench coat your favorite. This would enhance your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to maintain consistent verb tenses; for instance, instead of 'I hope, I will get another one', it could be 'I hope to get another one'. This will improve the fluidity of your writing.
task achievement
You effectively conveyed your excitement about the trench coat, making it relatable and engaging.
coherence and cohesion
The overall structure of your essay is logical and easy to follow, allowing the reader to track your thoughts clearly.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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