The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens. Write a report for a university lecture describing the information below.

The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens. Write a report for a university lecture describing the information below.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens. Write a report for a university lecture describing the information below.
The pie charts illustrate the comparison of expenditures on seven different types of categories in the year 1966 and1996 in America.
Overall
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, in the beginning of the period, the highest amount of expense was paid for food,
while
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the least number of expenses
spent
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was spent
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on computers.
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, after three decades car sales became the biggest part of the economy, and
the
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book sales reduced
in
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by
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considerable
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a considerable
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amount as the smallest part of sales. In 1966, in America citizens paid
highest
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the highest
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amount
on
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for
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food
was
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44% and, it remarkably dropped to 14% after 30 years. Books, petrol and
furnitures
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furniture
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also
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fell from 6%,9%,9% to 1%,8%,
8
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and 8
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% respectively in 1996. When compared with 1966, expenses on books
was
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significantly declined by 5% in 1996. In 1966, expenses
on
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for
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the car
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car
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cars
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was 23% and
it
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they
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increased remarkably in 1996 to almost half (45%) and
restaurants
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restaurant
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expenditures
was
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doubled in 1996 from 7% to 14%. People's
intresting
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interesting
was on computers grew during the three decades from 1% to 10%.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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