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The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.

The pie charts below compare water usage in San Diego, California and the rest of the world.
The charts illustrate three types of
water
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use
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, namely residential, industrial, and agricultural, in
San
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Diego
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,
California
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, and across the world.
It is clear that
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 there is a significant difference in
water
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consumption
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 patterns between Southern America and the rest of the world. Notably, residents in
San
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Diego
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use
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 a considerably larger amount of
water
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 than their counterparts in
California
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 and other global regions. Looking first at global
water
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consumption
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, agriculture accounts for the largest portion, at 69%.
This
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 contrasts sharply
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 the figures in both
California
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 and
San
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Diego
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, representing 28% and 17 %, respectively.
Similarly
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, the residential category
also
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 reports an opposite trend between the global
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 usage and that in the Southern United States. Only 8% of worldwide
water
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consumption
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 goes to domestic
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,
whereas
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 household
water
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use
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 makes up 39% in
California
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 and 60% in
San
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Diego
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, nearly seven times the global figure.
In contrast
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, industrial
water
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consumption
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 shares a similar pattern across all given areas. Both
San
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Diego
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 County and the world regions show an identical figure of 23%,
while
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 the proportion for
California
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 is slightly higher at 33%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, san, diego, california, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • households
  • significant
  • industrial use
  • implications
  • agriculture
  • geographical
  • climatic
  • economic factors
  • patterns
  • sustainability
  • practices
  • surprising
  • exceptionally
  • improvements
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