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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The table and
pie
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charts
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 present information on the police budget between 2017 and 2018 in a Britain area. The table illustrates where the
money
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 came from and the
pie
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charts
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 show how it was spent.
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, the table shows that the police budget has increased in 2018 in all three sources( national government, low tasks, and other sources like grants),
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 the
pie
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charts
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 show three ways
which
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money
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 was distributed (salaries, technology, building and transport) and presents the percentage of each one in the two years. In 2017, the police budget was in total of 304.7m and it increased by about 14m in 2018. The biggest increase was in local taxes, it has been increased from 91.2m to 102.3m.
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, the lowest percentage was on other sources like grants, increasing by 0.5m. The
pie
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charts
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 focus on how the
money
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 was spent.
Money
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 was spent in three different ways, the most common way that it was spent was salaries.
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, it decreased from 75% in 2017 to 69% in 2018.
On the other hand
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, technology has increased from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018.
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 buildings and transport did not change in both years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, charts, money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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