The chart below give us information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below illustrates the proportion of salary spent by one
famaily
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family
weekly comparing the years 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, as can be seen
the
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food accounted for the highest percentage in
thr
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the
first year of the statistics. At the same time, fuel and power
was
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had the lowest among all items.
Moreover
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, there is little difference between the percentages of several sections.
To begin
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with, the 1968 period shows categories
wity
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with
closely similar numbers.
For example
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,
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fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
,
household
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and household
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and personal goods had slight variations between them.
In contrast
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, other sections had
also
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the same point.
Furthermore
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, only
the
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leisure crossed the barrier of 20% in 2018.
In addition
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,
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the foods
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foods
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food
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bar
has
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reached
the
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a
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peak
at
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35 per cent to
became
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the greatest figure in 1968 and 2018.
Also
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, all other groups did not
achieved
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over 10%.
Lastly
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, fuel and power class has recorded only 5.5% in 1968

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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