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Band 4

In many countries, women and men are working full time.it is there fore logical for men and women to share household tasks.to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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lot of countries
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gender
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 are working
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full time
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 statement because
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 believe that
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sharing
 household
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taske
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tasks
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man
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 since they are working full time will lead to
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comfortable
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express
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relevant
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 believe since
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gender
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 have to
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 full time and they have busy
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 sharing
taskes
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tasks
 between them will be
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valuable
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house
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taskes
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tasks
 and make it more easily to share
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 together
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 newspaper employer parents have more good quilty
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 than others because they share the responsiblaty and faced the challenges between theme.
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consequently
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taske
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task
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lives
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 and lead to
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management
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house
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the house
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work
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 to get
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 good quality of
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 . On
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 as result
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of
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 sharing
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house
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a house
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taske
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task
take
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work
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work-life
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life
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 balanced and that will lead to have better
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life
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man
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men
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 and
women
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 reducing
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stress and avoid the problem that could happen
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balanced
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 between
women
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man
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men
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 can affect
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children
 as well ,
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 when
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 and
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women
woman
 sharing their
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together
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children
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 good example for teamwork and improve to them the idea of sharing the task and responsibilities it
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 depend by one
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 but by teamwork and cooperation .
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shariring
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sharing
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taske
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task
tasks
 and responsibility between
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gender
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genders
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 will help the next
gender
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 to be
an
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 teamwork and affect
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society
 to be improved by cooperation ,
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 making
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life
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 more
comfotable
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comfortable
 and smooth to live
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together
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an
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 organized and quality
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 and decrease mental issues like stress and anxiety .

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task achievement
The introduction needs to clearly state your position on the topic more explicitly. Clarifying your stance with stronger phrasing would enhance understanding.
coherence and cohesion
Be cautious of spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'sharring' instead of 'sharing,' which can distract the reader. Proofreading can help improve clarity.
task achievement
The examples provided, such as the Dubai newspaper reference, need to be connected better to your points. More specific and well-developed examples can strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Structuring paragraphs more clearly can help maintain logical flow. Using topic sentences for each paragraph might enhance coherence.
task achievement
You have addressed the task and offered your opinion, which is a good start.
task achievement
You have attempted to argue the benefits of sharing household tasks, which is a relevant point for the essay topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • work-life balance
  • traditional gender roles
  • domestic duties
  • household tasks
  • gender stereotypes
  • partnership
  • role modeling
  • teamwork
  • responsibility sharing
  • family dynamics
  • efficiency
  • collaboration
  • stress reduction
  • next generation
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