You recently visited a tourist attraction in another city. Write a letter to a friend describing your experience. In your letter: Describe the tourist attraction you visited. Explain why you chose to visit it. Share your impressions and experiences. Invite your friend to visit the attraction with you in the future.

Dear Smith, Hope
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letter finds you well. I am writing
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letter to share my experience of visiting
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Niagara Falls. As you know, I have been living in Mississauga
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from
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last
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three years and haven't got any chance to explore Canada
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my studies. But recently when I passed my exams my husband gave me
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on our fourth anniversary. I was so excited about the trip because I
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heard
alot
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a lot
about Niagara Falls. We stayed there for two days in
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. When I reached
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the destination I was so amazed
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the beauty of
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going down with
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heavy flow.
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night, the view was incredible there is
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big street with
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of restaurants
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as
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there are some haunted houses for kids and adults. I enjoyed
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fun games. In our
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we got
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room
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23rd
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level of
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the building
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with
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view side. The lighting was great and
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beautiful
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, my sister recommended to
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there because she has been there
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of times
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that she told me to visit America. But I don't have
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to visit that country, I remember you told me you got
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for America. So, I highly recommend to visit that place. We are planning to go there next month and I want to invite you to join us. I hope we will enjoy going there together. I look forward to your prompt reply. Best regards, Saijbir Kaur.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use complete phrases and appropriate connectors to enhance coherence.
task achievement
Try to maintain a parallel structure in your ideas, particularly when recounting experiences or listing reasons.
task achievement
Your letter has a warm and friendly tone, making it very engaging.
coherence and cohesion
You gave a clear description of the attraction and shared personal experiences that made it sound inviting.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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