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The map below is of town of Garldson, a new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of town of Garldson, a new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map below is of
city
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the city
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 of Garldsom, a modern supermarket is planned for the country. It illustrates two potential locations for the market.
Overall
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, it is clear from the map that, the second site,
located
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is located
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 in the middle of the town. At the same time, the second area seems like a
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faraway
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far away
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faraway
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 place
about
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with
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 different facilities but it is closer to another city,
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 the data presented, the S1 area
located
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is located
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 in the countryside
north east
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northeast
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 of the map near
to
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apply
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Hindon city which has 10,000 citizens who will benefit from
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 building
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in additional
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additional
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 to Garldsom's residents.
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, it is between two significant roads, close to the north housing space and industry region.
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, the second option has many advantages
such
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 as
near
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being near
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to
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two cities
in
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 the south side.
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, it is located in the middle of the housing areas of
this
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 town.
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, the primary positive is the town centre, where is the supermarket located.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • infrastructure
  • accessibility
  • foot traffic
  • local traffic
  • visibility
  • suitability
  • residential areas
  • main highway
  • convenience shoppers
  • shopping habits
  • attraction
  • characteristics
  • potential locations
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