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As the political and social conditions around the world are transforming the trend of the immigration is increasing day by day . What do you think what can be positive and negative impact of immigration

Nowadays, many
people
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 tend to migrate globally and
this
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 trend is increasing day by day.
This
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 trend has some positive
impact
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impacts
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as well as
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 negative consequences and
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 essay will address both views. On the one hand, migration provides many job opportunities, because many local
people
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 in a host
country
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 refuse to work some sort of jobs
such
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 as cleaning, cooking, hospitality and caregiving.
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, many workers are easily employed and take the opportunity to migrate to their dream
countries
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.
This
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offers
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allows
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 them to settle in a developed nation and serve many
benifits
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benefits
for their whole family.
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, many
countries
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 have some kind of
workforces
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workforce
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has
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that has
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 a direct residence pathway and it offers facilities for the family and education for children.
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 to that, qualified
people
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 can apply for
further
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 education to develop their career and skills, and after
gain
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gaining
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 better qualifications they will serve good service to their own
country
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.
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, migration offers many
benifits
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benefits
 for
people
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's lives.
On the other hand
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,
increasing
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the increasing
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 migrant population impacts on
countrie's
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countries
country's
 cost of living, because the government has to provide
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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 and other services
according to
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 the population.
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,
the
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apply
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pollution, traffic congestion,
poor
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and poor
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 sanitation are arising
due to
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growing
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the growing
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popultion
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population
 of the
country
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.
According to
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thses
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these
 changes, the citizen's quality of life will
diminished
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diminish
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 and
deteriorated
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deteriorate
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 significantly over the years.
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, in some
countrie's
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countrie
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 air pollution has surged
the
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in the
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last
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 few decades with
rising
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the rising
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 population and the lung
diseases
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disease
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 rate
also
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 increasing
according to
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 the statistics.
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,
people
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 moving to overseas
countries
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has
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have
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 some
drwbacks
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drawbacks
. In conclusion, there are
number
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a number
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 of individuals
tend
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who tend
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 to emigrate to a new
country
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 and it has some kind of
benifids
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benefits
 and drawbacks.
Although
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,
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apply
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this
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 provides good jobs,
salary
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salaries
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 and education, it affects on
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countries
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country
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 quality of life and cost of living.

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task achievement
Clarify your arguments and make sure each point is fully developed. For example, elaborate more on how migration affects the home country positively, as you have mostly focused on benefits for the host country.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more effectively to enhance the flow of your essay. For example, transition smoothly between points on the positive and negative impacts of migration.
coherence and cohesion
Review grammar and vocabulary: There are a few spelling mistakes (e.g., 'benifits', 'countrie's', 'popultion', 'drwbacks') that should be corrected for a more professional tone.
task achievement
You have a clear introduction that outlines the essay's purpose, and you have included relevant examples to support your points.
task achievement
Your essay presents a balanced view of both positive and negative impacts of immigration, which is important for a comprehensive discussion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration
  • economic growth
  • cultural diversity
  • innovation
  • entrepreneurship
  • public services
  • social tensions
  • xenophobia
  • demographics
  • policy decisions
  • job creation
  • host country
  • community cohesion
  • nationalism
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