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The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the comparison of how people
access
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 the
news
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 between Canada and Australia.
Overall
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,
while
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 online shows the highest proportion of getting
news
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 in Australia,
TV
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 is the most common
way
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 to
access
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 information in Canada. Both countries have similar results for the least common
way
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 of
access
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, which is Radio. In Canada,
TV
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 has the largest percentage of
access
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 to
news
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, making up approximately one-fourth of the total and following online, just 4% less than
TV
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.
This
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 represents an online is
also
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 a common
way
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 to get information about
news
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. Print shows 14%,
this
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 percentage provides us
the
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with the
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 fact that Canadians still follow the traditional
way
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. Radio is the most common
way
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 to get information
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accounting for 7% of the total.
In contrast
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, Australia shows the highest proportion
for
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of
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 Online, accounting for 52%.
This
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 is a quarter larger amount than the Canadian rate for online. Following online,
TV
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 ranked
second,
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which has 37
percentages
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per cent
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.
This
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 fact demonstrates that Australian people are more familiar with digital devices. Only 2% and 7% of Australians use radio and print to gather
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. The significant differences in the
way
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of
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apply
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Australians and Canadians
access
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 the
news
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 visualise the applicability of the digital society.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words access, news, tv, way with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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