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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999.
The line chart illustrates data from 1989 to 1999 the
UK
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 residents made international trips and domestic tours and the bar chart explains the most famous destination by tourists from the
UK
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 in 1999, measured by millions.
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, the international visits were higher than domestic trips from the first year. Based on the data, visitors from the
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 to another country started at around 12 in 1979 and grew slightly to 20
million
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 in 1984.
Thereafter
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, the number of visitors increased dramatically from 20 and reached their peak at 50
million
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 in 1999.
On the other hand
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, the domestic were lower than international tours and started at 10
million
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 in 1979.
Then
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, the tourist rose a bit in 1984 to around 12
million
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. By 1989, the domestic tour escalated rapidly from 20 to approximately 28
million
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 in 1999.
In addition
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, there are 5 well-known countries for
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 tourists in 1999(USA, France, Spain, Greece, Turkey). France was leading at roughly
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10
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 visitors, followed by Spain at approximately 9
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. The
last
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 3 countries were the lowest (USA, Greece, Turkey) about under 5
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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