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Thanking a friend for a holiday. You have recently been to stay with an old friend for a few days. You hadn't seen each other for a long time. Write a letter to the friend. In your letter: •say how you felt about the visit •refer to something enjoyable that you did while staying with him / her •invite your friend to visit you Begin your letter as follows: Dear ________

Dear Raman, I hope
this
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 letter finds you in good health and high
spirit
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spirits
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. It was indeed a great experience for me to meet you in India for a week . I felt quite excited to meet you after a long
time
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, probably after half a decade. I am writing to thank you for an amazing
time
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 and your hospitality during the trip. I would like to invite you
at
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to
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 my home. The whole week was absolutely awesome.
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, the trip
Golden
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to Golden
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 Temple
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that
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which
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 is located in Amritsar, Punjab will remain in my memory forever. That evening we had a fabulous dinner at
punjabi
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Punjabi
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 haveli and it was the best meal that I have had in a decade. I wish I could make the
time
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 stop. As you have mentioned, you have a
planned
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plan
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 to visit Canada for a two
week
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weeks
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in
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at
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 the end of
this
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 year. I would love to be my guest and stay with my family.
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 would give me an opportunity to
spen
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spend
 some
time
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 with you and have you in my house. Warm wishes, Rupinder.

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task achievement
Try to add more specific details about your feelings during the visit to enhance emotional connection.
coherence and cohesion
Use transitions between sentences to improve the flow of ideas, making your writing more cohesive.
task achievement
Your enthusiasm for the visit and the experiences shared, like the trip to the Golden Temple, are clearly conveyed.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is appropriate for the context.
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