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Band 4

You live in an English speaking country and you want to do some voluntary, unpaid work in a developing country. Write a letter to a company called Cultural Expeditions, which organizes such trips. In your letter: Explain why you want to do the voluntary work. State what your skills and experience are. Indicate where you would like to volunteer and for how long. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir / Madam

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Mary. I live in Canada, pursuing a
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 degree, and I would like to do some voluntary work in a developing country. One of
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 why I am drawn to doing unpaid work is that I came from a developing country and I received a lot of help from
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 volunteers, motivating me to make
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 to the world. I hold both a bachelor's and a master's degree in early childhood education. After graduation in 2017, I had been a kindergarten teacher for 7 years. Now I am pursuing a
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 preschool science education in Canada. So I think I can do some work like daycare or teaching science. I prefer to volunteer in African countries during
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 and summer
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. Thank you for your time and patience. I look forward to your response. Warm regards Mary

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task achievement
Consider adding a specific location in Africa where you wish to volunteer, as this would clarify your intent further.
coherence and cohesion
In the second paragraph, it might improve the flow if you connect your past experiences more directly to how they prepare you for the specific volunteer role you seek.
suitable writing tone
Your letter has a warm and polite tone throughout, which is very engaging.
complete response
You effectively communicated your motivation for wanting to give back, which enhances your connection to the cause.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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