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The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The chart below shows estimated world literacy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
the bar chart shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and gender for the past 2000 years, I will write a report for a university.
Overall
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, we can see
that
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is
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apply
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the highest
countries
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is
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are
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 South
Asia
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, Arab States and
Sub Saharan
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Sub-Saharan
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 Africa and we can see the huge difference between them and East
Asia
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/Oceania, Latin America/
caribbean
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Caribbean
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 and the Developed
Countries
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. At
first,
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we can see
the
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that
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 South
Asia
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 and Arab States females are from 50 to 60 and they are the highest in the chart after that
come
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comes
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 the Sub Saharan Africa very close
the
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to the
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 two past
countries
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 by almost 50, after
that
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that,
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 we can see the big difference in East
Asia
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/Oceania by only 20 after that
comes
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comes to
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 Latin America/
caribbean
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Caribbean
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 by around 10 and at least Developed
Countries
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 by almost 2
Secondly
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, the males in South
Asia
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, Arab States and
Sub Saharan
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Sub-Saharan
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 Africa are very
colse
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close
 to
eceh
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each
 other by almost 30 and the rest
countries
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 are around 10 except Developed
Countries
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 almost 1.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • literacy rates
  • gender gap
  • regional disparities
  • socio-economic factors
  • male literacy
  • female literacy
  • overviews
  • notable differences
  • highest literacy regions
  • moderate literacy regions
  • lowest literacy regions
  • estimated data
  • educational attainment
  • cultural influences
  • development levels
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