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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Islip town centre now Countryside Shops Main road Shops Housing E Park School Housing Islip town centre: planned development W E Dual-» carriageway Bus Shopping Car station centre park Pedestrians only Shops Housing New housing New housing Park School Housing PA

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Islip town centre now Countryside Shops Main road Shops Housing E Park School Housing Islip town centre: planned development W E Dual-» carriageway Bus Shopping Car station centre park Pedestrians only Shops Housing New housing New housing Park School Housing PA
The graphs provide information about the Islips town centre now and constructions that will
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place in the future.
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, it can be clearly seen from the map that new housing will be developed alongside the dual carriageway,
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 the school and the park will remain the same. Looking at greater detail, a long road called a dual carriageway will be built around the town as a circle.
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, the main road
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 the current time will be replaced by shops in the middle of the town.
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, they will build a new housing area in the north and the south side of the shops.
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, the park in the east area will be not relocated but will be smaller,
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 the school in the west. There are newly constructed facilities that will take place on the north side of the shop
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 as a bus station, a shopping centre and a car park.
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, between these buildings and the shop, there will be a new road only for pedestrians.

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