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The charts below show the percentage spent on roads and transport in four countries from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage spent on roads and transport in four countries from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
given
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bar chart illustrates the proportion of
road
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 and
transport
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 spending
from
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by
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government
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the government
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 in four different
countries
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 from 1990 to 2005.
Overall
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, there was more spending on
road
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 and
transport
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 in Portugal than
other
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in other
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 mentioned
countries
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 over the period.
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, the spending from
USA
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the USA
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 government showed the balance through 15 year-period. With regard to the first two
countries
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, both Italy
as well as
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 Portugal
gorvernment
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government
 spent the
highest
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most
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 money in 1990 with exactly 20% and about 25% respectively. In 1995 and 2000,
the
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road
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 and
transport
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 spending accounted for nearly 17% and 20% in Italy which
less
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was less
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 than 5%
the
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of the
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 spending in Portugal
at
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in
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 the same years. Meanwhile, both these
countries
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 spending in 2005 made up approximately 15%. Moving on the remaining
countries
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 where had the least spending over the timeframe. As for the USA,
it's
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its
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 spending on
road
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 and
transport
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 balanced with about 15% in all year. In terms of the UK, it consisted of 12% spending in 2000 which
approximately
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is approximately
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 equal to the spending in 1995;
similarly
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, not only the spending in 2000, but
also
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 in 2005 made up around 6% in both years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, transport, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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