The picture below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The illustration provided presents the various steps of the process by which wasted
glass
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bottles
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are recycled.
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, there is a multi-stage process that begins with the collection of used
glass
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bottles
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, before putting them through the recycling process and ends with finished products which are ready for sale.
To begin
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, wasted
glass
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bottles
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are dropped at the collection point before being delivered to the factory, but they are washed
by
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with
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high-pressure water and sorted by three colours including brown, green, and clear before being sent to the
glass
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factory. Once they are already in the factory, they are broken
by
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into
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pieces and
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being
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passed to
furnace
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a furnace
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for burning at 600—800 Celsius until they become recycled liquid
glass
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.
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this
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, both recycled and new liquid
glass
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are mixed before being shaped in
glass
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mould. The final stage is that various liquid products are filled into these
bottles
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and
then
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they are transported to
supermarket
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the supermarket
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to be sold.

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task achievement
Your essay presents a clear overview of the recycling process, but consider summarizing the main features in a more structured way. You might want to explicitly compare the stages or note key differences/similarities.
coherence
There are a few small inaccuracies in phrasing and sentence structure. For instance, 'broken by pieces' could be rephrased to 'broken into pieces' for clarity. Additionally, some sentence constructions could be simplified for better flow.
coherence
Consider adding transitional phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs. This will enhance the logical progression of your ideas.
task achievement
Your essay clearly outlines the complete recycling process, making it easy for the reader to understand the steps involved.
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You have made a good attempt to include specific details about the different stages of recycling, which adds depth to your response.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recycling process
  • Waste glass bottles
  • Collection
  • Sorting
  • Cleaning
  • Crushing
  • Melting
  • Cullet
  • Furnace
  • Molten glass
  • Molding
  • Forming
  • Cooling
  • Inspection
  • Defects
  • Packaging
  • Distribution
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