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The diagram below shows how glass is recycled

The diagram below shows how glass is recycled
The diagram illustrates the recycling process of
glass
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.
Overall
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, there are six stages in the process, beginning with throwing
glass
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 into bins
ending
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and ending
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 in delivering. The process commences when different types of
bottles
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 made of
glass
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 are collected in special recycling bins.
Then
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, some of
bins
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the bins
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 are sent to a factory by truck in order to go through
treatment
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the treatment
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 plant to reuse for some purposes. In the factory,
glass
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bottles
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 are cleaned and sterilised in water with the help of machines In the next stages, clean
bottles
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 are crushed, being under a pressing machine, and
then
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 they are boiled and melted by fire in high temperatures. After that, liquid
glass
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 is put into moulding machines with the same shape
of
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as
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bottles
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.
Finally
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, new redesigned
bottles
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 are ready for human consumption and delivered to the supermarkets

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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