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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population living in cities in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population living in cities in four Asian countries from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph
depics
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depicts
 the findings related to the fraction of the inhabitants residing in the cities of four different
nation
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nations
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 in Asia in
years
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the years
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 1970 to 2020 and
also
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anticipating
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 the same for
next
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the next
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 3 and 4 decades. In the starting year of data collected, the proportion of
residence
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residents
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 in all
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four countries was not more than 30%.
Percentage
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The percentage
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 of
population
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the population
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was
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gradually increased by 20% in All the Nations, up to the year 1990.
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, all along in 2020, the fraction of the people in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 was
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 50%, Malaysia
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at first had around 80% population,
the
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and the
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 smallest quarter shared was of 30% only, why Thailand and Indonesia had
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an exact
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exact
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 half
percent
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per cent
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 of
total
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the total
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 population.
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, discussing the predictions for 2030 and 2040, it is analysed that an abrupt increase will take place in the next 2-3 decades. The rate of residence will be highest in Meghalaya, where has other three nations are supposed to provide
livehood
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livelihood
 to 60%, 55% and 50% in Indonesia, Philippines and Thailand respectively.
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, the
above mention
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above-mentioned
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the
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countries had a low ratio of inhabitants in 1970, which
are
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is
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 predicted to
be raised
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rise
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 abruptly up to the
year
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years
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 2030 and 2040.

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