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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares different proportions of
women
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 higher degrees in five different countries in the years 1980 and 2015. The data is measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is evident that the figures in Canada remained unchanged during the period, comprising the largest number of high-level educated
women
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.
In contrast
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, Japan had the lowest portion of
women
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 who went to university;
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,
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 portion witnessed a sharp rise later. In 1970, more than half of
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Canda
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Canada
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 left school and got higher education certificates and the number was the same in 2005.
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, in Germany, there was no significant difference between the percentages, being around 50% and 55% in 1970 and 2015, respectively.
On the other hand
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, the UK and the USA followed similar trends. In 1970,
women
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 who went into higher academic levels were approximately 35% in the UK and nearly 40% in the USA.
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, in 2005, these portions saw a sharp increase, reaching 60% in the UK and a fraction below 60% in the USA.
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,
in1970
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in 1970
, Japanese
women
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 who attend higher education comprised only one-fourth of of total
women
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 but
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 number had a dramatic rise hitting nearly 40% in 2015.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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